Putting it in the light of “arrogant and austere” makes it a whole lot better immediately. I see where you’re coming from now.
I’m still not a major fan of the pan piece specifically. I think it would perhaps look better if it were over one of his eyes, similar to Kopaka’s lens, but I think the result may ruin the grandiose look.
Honestly, looking at it a second time, it looks much better than I thought it did. Perhaps it was just the initial disconnect from how I’d visualized it in my head. I think it should be a bit larger, because it seems tiny in comparison to the shoulders, but the cloak will help with that for sure.
In terms of face structure, I think the Icarax version of the Krahkaan and Kirop’s mask illustrate what I imagined it looking like (my drawing skills are garbage, so I doubt I’ll be able to produce an image, but I will certainly try), though I think that’s mostly my cognitive bias towards the original. I don’t know. I think it will be fine as-is, but I agree with you that the space under the eyes needs to be addressed.
As always, thank you for taking the time to consult me. It’s very much appreciated.