The Legends Of Mythron chapter 2 The Festival part 1

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something to catch the readers eye[/quote]

Not separating paragraphs and causing giant disjointed blobs of text to form isn’t going to catch a reader’s eye.

Trust me.

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Well, it will. Theoretically speaking, that is. Through, I do not suppose it will be from the right reason.

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Sorry, but the grammatical errors are a big turn off for me and I find it hard to get invested in what’s going on. The story kind of drags on in this chapter, I’m not saying that your whole planned story will be like that, but this is mostly just exposition. The gladiator fights sound like an interesting idea though.

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