Barraki, Mahri-Nui - ART ART ART! [Worldbuilding] [Pitch] [Art] [Character]

You wanted it, you shall have it!

#INTRODUCING!

  • Explore new/old Artakha, ruled by cruel Warlords!
  • Dive deep underwater to a lost city of Mahri!
  • Defeat new villians, find new friends, see you past selves being way more epic than you shall ever be!

##All new!

  • Characters!
  • Villians!
  • Heroes!
  • Locations!
  • Creatures!
  • And much, much more!

###Only if you read this thread!

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@AntrozT6 @Bokarda I’ll definitely agree to the effectiveness of pictures; I’m glad I was able to find a nice niche with stories and music. Otherwise I’m pretty sure my posts would be buried into oblivion. (And I mean, some of the stories kind of did…)
Though to be fair, it’s also a hit-and-miss with the cast sometimes. Of the multiple times Apotheosis has been discussed, poor Irarok has never shown up, and now he’s been booted from canon.
The problem with a mega thread like this is that it’s constantly evolving with 135 posts to date; it’s too much to read through for a possible major addition to the storybible. Maybe if the details have been set straight, you should condense all of the info down and make a new post; that’ll probably be easier to digest.

Also, am I to expect some begging soon? A good thing to win me over is the tears of orphans and a box of kittens. :smiling_imp:

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@DarkMaestro Well, but it is condensed into one post, that is the main topic. The only thing not very clear is the inclusion of Karzahni, that is controversial and should probably be removed, but we’ll have to discuss it first. Otherwise, you were never supposed to read all 137 (now 8) posts, just the original topic, which (as stated at the bottom of the pitch) is continuously updated, new ideas always being added.

You can see that with the third part (Old Artakha), that was never there before, only being added recently, and if you look into the edits, you can see the descriptions of the timeline and the characters have changed multiple times.
Thanks for the reply, though! How many kittens?

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According to the recent Reply episode, if no one says “I’m Eljay” then you may get those tears.

… The kittens may be dead, though…

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Funnily enough, I had to separate my Kal pitch from my Future pitch for the exact reason of everything growing to large. Ironically, my Kal pitch is now larger than my Future pitch :laughing:.

My Kanohi Period pitch kinda covers Old Artakha, although it focuses more on the war and the Toa Kanohi. That said, @AntrozT6 could make a separate pitch specifically for Old Artakha, and then I could link it to the Kanohi Period.

Would the tears of kittens and a box of orphans work? :crying_cat_face: :gift::boy::girl:

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I made an update, completely removing Karzahni and all his elements out of the pitch. He just didn’t fit at all. We can place another Karzahnian in his place in the Whispering Caves, maybe Nyalathoth?

Also, I’ve run out of characters this is the max we can get, so I’ll most likely have to either create a new pitch for the Old Artakha section, as @Bokarda suggested, or ask a mod if it is possible to extend, or even double the character limit.

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On another Karzahnian: Nyalathoth sounds like a good pick.

On Old Artakha: a new topic would probably be better, for the sake of freeing up space in this topic

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Another image to the Art of this pitch, to encourage reading!


Tbh I never realized how fitting WoD can be to the Barraki. Let’s hope their possible addition to the canon won’t be as trashy as the expansion itself.

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I’m both amused by the image and impressed that these concepts works well with each other :laughing:

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I added few minor adjustments to the pitch, aswell as adding Nyalothoth to the rahi section. It’s gotten really big!

I will try to write the Warlord Period some time this week, I’ll see when. Either way, you can still post your ideas!

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New designs for the Barraki made by @DarkMaestro!

Takadox (Post mutation)

Kalmah (Post mutation)

Ehlek (Post mutation)

Pridak (Post mutation)

Once again thank you @DarkMaestro for this art!

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I love these designs for them! Can’t wait for Carapar and Mantax!

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Just wanted to say this:

In my class we have a Jonathan, a Elijah, a Peter, a Keith, a Karina, a Sarah, a Hannah and a Queenstar.

Our own culture is not a stranger to having names that sound a little odd or out of place.

(The art is really good and is making me think about this pitch a lot more. Still not sold on the idea of a ton of other races, but…)

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Technically still Matoran, just altered by deep-sea conditions and other mutations. Unless you mean the non-Matoran beings, which is understandable.

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Thank you for the kind words and thank DarkMaestro for the art.

About the other races, can you please specify a bit more? I do not believe we added any. Apart from the new Karzahnian creations (Which is more-or-less not a race)
Every character in this pitch is a Matoran. In G1, the barraki were each their own separate species. Here, that is not the case. They were simply mutated to survive underwated by the prison they were kept in.

As I believe that post was overlooked, I’d advise you to read this post if you have any questions regarding the pitch, I already adressed some of the more obvious ones.

If you have anything to say/ask, please, do so so we can edit the pitch accordingly! Thank you for reading!

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The Barraki art looks really good but some of the colors seem a bit off and Pridak’s gold isn’t working for me.

Here are a few quick color tweaks I made to DarkMaestro’s amazing art.


Her is my suggestion for Pridak’s color scheme.

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moar… MOAR

Incredible art by @DarkMaestro

Mantax! Mysterious and creepy!

Carapar! Huge and utterly terrifying!
Here’s a queue from DarkMaestro himself:
“For Carapar, I got an idea from a type of hermit crab. What they do is instead finding a shell, they stick random debris and foliage to their backs. So I thought it would be cool if Carapar had some ship wrecking on his back or something.”

AND MORE ON THE WAY!

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For Takadox, I was trying to recreate the translucent glowing pieces on his set; but the darker tones look pretty good.
I’m not entirely sure on the changes to Pridak. Being the only “true ruler” and having a psychotic ideology about aesthetics, I imaged he would carry himself with some twisted grandeur. So he has golden bracelets and leg armor to display his self-imposed superiority.

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Ah, that makes sense but I don’t think LEGO has any blue glowing printing. Maybe he could have transparent pieces to sort of convey a glowing aspect?

I understand why you gave him gold but the colors just seem to clash too much for me.

@DarkMaestro, Maybe silver could work?


By the way, I love the masks and overall aesthetics of your Barraki art, it is truly amazing.

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@DarkMaestro Absolutely amazing job on these. If there was some way to buy these I would do it without a second thought.

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