Both MOCs are pretty good. The only problem I have is the color distribution. The "before" MOC could use some pearl dark grey on the legs, and the "after" MOC could use just a few more white pieces so that axe doesn't jump out as much.
The backstory is a bit bad, but the actual MOC is great.
The torso is really good, and it gives a menacing stature to the MOC.
I don't really like the weapon, as i feel like it sticks out too much.
Other than that I think it's pretty good.
Overall a well built and good looking moc. I don't really like the color scheme, but that's just me. The feet sadly look exactly like what they are build-wise; two feet stacked on top of each other with a round pad (which also doesn't fit into the whole skeleton theme) on the top. The axe also sticks out, but only because of the colors.
this sounds pretty harsh, sorry for that.