In your attempt to make a more feminine shape I think you’ve made it more masculine.
So many first time female moc makers mess up very hard, especially if they’re young.
So most of this critique will end up being more about build philosophy rather than about your build itself.
You have to figure out the differences between men and women, most of the differences are subtle and that’s what’s important to get down, this goes for the obvious “big chest, big but, because that’s what makes women different then men”
In all reality all you need to do is just make a moc and call it female, the moc isn’t male by default, and with lego it can be hard to make these subtle differences.
The chest area is essentially what PoF does, though the build may be different, but this gives the moc much broader shoulders and a barrel chest look, unless going for a very specific look (like samus for example) this isn’t what you’d want when you want someone to see the moc and think “that’s a girl” the shoulders should be about as wide as the hips, wider shoulders conveys a more masculine feel, the torso is also really short.
The way the hips connect to the torso isn’t a great connection, going to be really finicky.
And the giant rear end, get rid of it, it looks awful, and is a really poor attempt to convey the female look, you can do stuff like that well, but not usually on this scale and by very experienced moccists.
I suggest you look at real anatomical references and try to emulate those small differences, not exaggerate things like the chest and butt to such extremes.