Makuta Olisi: Awakening

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So recently,i have discovered that Greg has been sent away from lego,thus truly putting an end to bionicle.So now,I’ve decided that its time to release my Self-mocs story,and maybe soon perhaps the moc itself.As such please friends,gather around these lighstones of mine,and listen to my story…

Part 1:

@Senit parried @Rukah blades. As per usual,they were fighting in the courtyard,
their blades scraping against each other,scaring the gukko birds away. Helryx had
Relocated The Order of Mata Nui base to a more secluded location in sphereus magna after the fall of Teridax. Rukah soon took to the skies and rushed his opponent,until Senit electrocuted him with a strike of lighting,and he crashed comically into the ground. "Well,"She laughed.“Maybe try not to run into my strikes next time.” Rukah got up and brushed off his armor."Not completely accustomed to dealing with lighting bolts that come out of the sky on your whims,Senit."He replied. “Better get used to it.” Senit said. “Otherwise Tobduk is gonna melt your armor faster than a Toa of plasma!”
“Recruits!” A voice boomed.A figure approached the pair,clad in red and silver armor.“Your presence in required in Master Helryx’s office.”
“Yes,Trinuma,SIR!” They jumped to attention,and walked to Helryx’s office. Helryx was found there,pacing around when they entered. Her eyes immediatly locked on the pair."Ah good."She said. “I need you to retrieve what we believe a powerful artifact,one we wish to…safekeep. Be ready in 10 minutes.”
Rukah saluted smartly.“Understood Ma’am.”
“Good.”

Senit returned to her room,grabbing her spear and shield.She wrapped herself in her cloak,and returned to Trinuma.Rukah was already there,his crystal swords gleaming. “Alright.” Trinuma announced. “Grab a mount,and your destination is 12 klicks to the west.”

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After a day of traveling and rest,Rukah and Senit soon arrived at their destination.
They found a massive crater, with ruins surrounding it.As Senit slid down into the pit as Rukah was on lookout,she soon found the item.It was a very large red gem,roughly the size of a toa stone.As soon as she picked it up,it started to glow,and vibrate,as a thousand thoughts soon arose in Senit’s head in a panic.
What if it explodes? What if it drains me? She thought. Quelling these thoughts,she put it in her pack,and returned to Rukah."Got it?"Rukah asked.
“Yeah.” Senit replied.Her mind still crowded with thoughts,if she had listen to them,she would have heard a voice,not of her own…
Senit…

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sounds cool - looking forward to later chapters!

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Thanks!

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ooh interesting
It would be bit easier to read with paragraph breaks though

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Neat story so far

And also spaces after commas. It doesn’t make it hard to read, but it’s killin’ me man :weary:

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Hm nice. Seems interesting.

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ooh cool

Nui Stone?

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this is very fun to read
i love the characters :slight_smile:

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Is it Olisi or Oisli

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The former

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But your username is Oisli

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I don’t rlly care.i fine with it.

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You can pm a mod to change it if you want.

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Will this ever be continued?

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Probably,but it needs work,and i need ideas.

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Weren’t you going to make Senit and Rukah unlock the gem and free Olisi?

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Well yes,but technically no.
I also decided to get rid of chapter one,and make chapter 2 into the new first chapter.

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That’s kinda confusing…

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Part 2:

Helryx couldn’t rest. She was constantly woken up by the tearing of metal,
the grating of steel. She had made an audio log,but then his voice constantly came through when she was trying to console herself. She then finally opened the vault door, where the sound was coming from to observe her adversary. The vault was huge, containing artifacts of great power.
But its greatest treasure,was its prisoner.A blue armored figure with claws came into her view as she approached a cell.
“You will help me.” The figure exploded into a mad cacophony of laughter, his claws scraping and sawing against the metal floor, his mad laughter echoing in the dark vault.
“Oh is that what you cam down here for?” The Figure questioned. “You know i’m supposed to be dead. Your secrets will be unburied. You want to leave me here to rust.You’re scared. They will find me. Nothing is as it should be.”
Helryx shifted.
A smile emerged behind her mask.
“We have the key, Olisi. I will find the great beings,and you will help me, no matter if you want to or not.”
“You can’t make me.”
“We can make you.” Helryx sneered.
Olisi went dead silent.
He stood up, the chains straining.
“Ŷ̶͈͚̙̦̣̙̳̘͖̟̥͔̞͔̈́̃̒̉͒̆̕͝O̴̧̗̮͎̭̗̬̳͎͇̬͍̼̜̫͊̉̈́̅͌̽̌̏̚͝Ǘ̸̪̙͈̩̯͂ ̶̨̤̭̫̹̲̺̭̙͇̝̻̖̋̾̈́̔͐͜W̸̥̬̑̃̓͒̏͛̍̈͒I̵̻͉̙̝͐̾̎͛̋L̸̛͎͈̻̟̀̀̈́͊̓̈́̎͗͑̄́̌͜͠L̵͈̯̦̺̭̫̤͈͎͍̞̂ ̷̬̰̜̊F̸̬̻͖̳̹͙̞̼̔̀͌̀͒͂̿̈́͗͠Ǎ̴̧̨̛̭̥̤̺͙̯̞̙̣̻̞̓̌͐͗͜͠ͅI̶̧̡̮͈͑̂͑̀̑̕͘̕͜ͅL̵̢̛̥͓͙̟͇̣̐̈̀̂̀̇͐̚̕͝.̷̡̝̖̙̹̻͗̄̌̃̏́̆͘͝.” He said, with absolute conviction.
Helryx stepped back.
"“̴̯̮͇̗̙̗̙͓̹͚̯̯͜͜͠T̴̛̻̮̐͂̅̈́̍̓̓͛̃̕͝H̴̪̗̙̳͖͎̞͇̺̿̎̽͗̋͋̽̾̑̈́̈́̍̀͘͠ͅĮ̵̨̺̣͓̱̭̭͕̙̃͑͆̍̊̈̈͐S̵̢̝͔̭̻͙̞͈̬͙̾̿̓́̑̽̌̊̒̏̎̕͠ ̴̳̦̩̺̘̌̿̌̐̽̍̊̇̍̍͛͆͝͠W̶̺̿̒͐͑̓̚ͅȎ̸̰͋͛̔̈́̍͊̋̈́̓̍̅͂R̴̡̘̙̮̦͚͊̎̎̓̇̓̓̍̈́̽̄̍̐̚͠L̴̗̼͙̼͓̓̓͂̑̂̕D̷̨͉̺̺̹̗̥͎̦̳͚̗͔̲̬̈̂̚̕ ̵̡̨̣̥̳̳̤̺̓̊̈́̾́̅̍̚͝Ẃ̵̞̟̫͎̘̎̎̓̎̓̀̆Į̸͕͔͔̦̰̳̙̠͖̥͙͇̪͐̊̓͊̀̅̿͗̈̇͋͘L̷͚̻̗͓̗͉̟͖̫̟̗̣͚̕͝ͅĻ̶͇͙͕͖̟̩̹͎̀̅͝͠ͅͅ ̵͓̟̪͉̮͑̉͋͗̎̉͑̏̚͝͠F̷̧̛͙̈́̈̕͝A̶̢̢̻̟̰̫̝̻̯̫̪̱̍̈́̓̎̃͜͠L̵̢̺̠̉̀͘͜L̵̤͍̲͙͓̯̱̥̕.̴͖̜͉̱̝͕̯̬̗͙̎̏̂́ ̷̣̪̯̪̻͖̅̀̂̊̎͂͗̄̀̽͠T̸̠̖̭̏̑́̽̾̆̍̐̓́͌̔Ḩ̵̗̤̘̘͓͈̹̙̘̲͎̜̙̮̆̊̓͂͒̏͝E̶̡̫̙̠̪̗͖̺͂̆̍̈̈́̀͂͑̅̐̏̚͜ ̵̡̧̛̤͓͖̺̩͍̣̹̱͑̅͋͌̏͛͘͝G̵̣͍̭̗̬̰̊̑̊̆̒̉́͐̒̽͝ͅR̶̲͓͉͓̩̲̯̒̈́̆̿̐Ë̸̥̬̖̙̙͓́́̂̎̿̇͊̽͛̑̅̄͑̕͝A̵̪̳͎̻̱̪̠͋̆̔́̄̋̐͌́̎͊̅̂͠͝ͅT̶̼͍͂̅̈́͋̾͆͌̏́̊̂̊̚͜͠͝ ̷̝͙̖͒̆̎̽̒͒̂̏̔̀̅͐̊͘͝ͅB̵̦̰̆̍̂͝Ě̸̪̆̊̃̾̈͊̅̾̆I̸̧̢͕̲͕̫̰̞͓̭͕͍͇̫̓Ṉ̸̖̬͛̿̆͐̃̌̇̚͘̕͜G̵̨̥̭̦̜̺͇̘̤̦̞̳̤̖̓͂̌̑̉̀̏͘͠ͅS̶̨̨͉̺̮̰̤͔̘͎̤̦̲̤̄͒̾̎͛́̄͗̑̀͑̕͝ ̴͈̹̾̀͛͊S̸̘̫̥̎̿̆͒̕̚Ṱ̵̯̥̙̜̂̾̈́͌̇̆̈́̈̊̋̌͘͝Ą̴̨̡̨̛̥͓͙͖̙̙͔̂͑̏̅̉̃͋̀͂̓̎͗͠Y̸̺̣̮͔͙̫̝͜͝E̸̠̦̳̣̹͎̘̰̓̃̇͛͆̏̔̉͂̿͂͒̐Ḑ̷̩̗̈́̑͑̿̇ͅ ̵̧͍̪͈͇̯̙͖̪̬̫̾̏̒͑̑̾͜H̵̛͍̳̅͑̀͛̏͊̀͌̈́́̇͂Ǐ̶̻̣̰͆̄̓̀̐͋̒͝D̶͓͍̫̪̠͖̙͎̭̭̘̱̜̀͂̓̏̓̏̚͝Ḑ̸̧͔͈̖̙̙̬̖͗̂͗̀̇E̵̡͔̞̙̦̮͇̔͐͠ͅṆ̸͙̝̖̜͕̬͔͙̩̳̘̿̽̓̅̒̔͆̎̿̈́̚̚͠ ̴̡̢͎̖̫̰͇͇̰̱̣̼͑̓̿̕F̷̧̱̪̣͇͉̞̝̘̂̿O̶̡̞̟̠̖̥̥͙̣̠͓̦͉̳̒͆̈́̽͗͜R̷̫̻̗̩̯͐̀̈́ͅ ̷̢̭̺̝͓̞̹̯͒̿̌́͂A̸͕̳͉̗͙̟̹͎͓̔͊̿͒̊̉̒̀̊͝͝ ̴̨̞̳̩̖̠͖̟̗͖̳͙͊͛̑̔̃͛̅̍̑̎͐̅Ŗ̸̙̬̲͔̙͈̘͙̥͇̞͓̙̒̎̂̊͂̎͒̂̋̏͝͠͠͝Ȩ̵̫̠̰̲̠͓͍̤̳͕͖͇͑Á̸̢͎̣̼̯̙̰̳̳̏̚̚͜S̷̡͇̳̞̗̗̪͉̰͓̱͌̈́̐O̵̝͈͕̎͂̃N̵̦̝͖̦̰͍̬̗̓̀̓͆͆̽̑̄̓̚.̵̙̱͉̹͖̦̎̈́͛̍͒́̏͑̀̂͂͗̀̐ ̵̞͙̜̖̬͔͎̩̗̀̌͜H̸̝̟͗͌͊̃̾Ę̸̯̱̲̹̘̘̝̍̒̿̈́̒̆͑̿̃͊̈͝E̵̛̠͛́̔̉́̽̐̊͒̚̕Ḑ̶̧̫̦̞̙̗͇͂̄ ̵̛̛̣̈́̈́̏̌̾̈̅̎̇̐M̶̢̡̛͔̹̞̞̖͔̙͉͍̰͉̗͓͛̉́̎̆̔͗̅̃̀͂̈́̉̚Y̸̛͇͋͂̋̐̈́̀̊̕͠ ̴̛̩͔̹̄̋̑̄͆̄͊̉̊̎͘̕W̶͕̹̼͈̝͂͗͗̓Ȧ̸̬̭̮̣́̌̓̓̓̌͒̀̈́͊̕͘͘͠Ŕ̸̨̼͕N̷̦͍̞̜͖̈̿͊͆Ī̴̦̰̭̤̫̮͖͋̀́̈́̽͘͘N̷͈̹̦̪̻̲̻͇͊̃̀͒̏̈́̏̓̍̍͌͑̿͝͝G̶̡̧̛̹̪̩̼͎̭͚̠̠͖̤̫̀́̾̆͆̅̍̆̊̏̓̋͜͠͠.̸̦͎̤̯̟͕̹̫̙̣͕͇̭̓͊̃̋̓̐̍̉̆͆͒̔̀͝͠I,OLISI,LAST OF THE BATTERA WILL NEVER REVEAL WHICH WHAT YOU SEEK.”

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@Senit 's dreams were vivid battles and lucid fantasies.
She dreamed of massive dermis turtles and small makikas.
Of training and fighting. Of becoming a great hero.
That was, until near the end. She found herself on a beach,the air filled with the sounds of birds. Two figures stood before her. One with strange armor,the other with wings and large ears. One offered their hand. She hesitated, and they faded from view. She woke with a start, and realized that @Rukah was sitting across from her,
simply staring at the sunrise.
“Well,” He said, observing that Senit was awake," Shall we get going?"
Senit jumped up. “Lets.” She answered.

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oho there’s another part! Nice job, I’m certainly intrigued… especially with the baterra part…