I am looking to write a song called BREAKING DARKNESS for Undertale, surrounding the character W.D.Gaster. I need opinions on the lyrics. Let’sa gooo!
So, the king’s daughter.
Ready to commit slaughter?
Watch the balance of reality teeter and tauter.
As the bonds get tighter.
Ignoring rationality, a bending reality
is brutality.
And that’s you?
If you hear sounds, I hear screams.
(I shuffle and muffle behind the scenes)
If it’s the fabric of space I sew the seams.
I’m a thought outside of dreams!
You called for help.
(Nobody came)
Come on little child let’s play a game.
Outside, on the astral plane.
Where dreams come true and nightmares are made!
I am no ordinary guy.
Been torn, reborn and made a lie!
Dou you know what it’s like to die?
Guess you’ll know soon.
(Better hide!) =)
Come out,
come out,
wherever you are!
Take a look at this facial scar!
It tells a story,
of fame and glory!
Just a warning,
the end is rather gory.
A long, long time ago,
201X
There was a cursed scientist, set to reverse the hex.
With his determination, faced extermination.
(DaRkER DarKER, YeT DaRKer)
The deeper you go the steeper the slope.
“Guess I better hold onto hope.”
The more you know doesn’t make you grow.
It just let’s you go.
If you hear sounds, I hear screams.
(I shuffle and muffle behind the scenes)
If it’s the fabric of space I sew the seams.
I’m a thought outside of dreams!
You called for help.
(Nobody came)
Come on little child let’s play a game.
Outside, on the astral plane.
Where dreams come true and nightmares are made!
I am no ordinary guy.
Been torn, reborn and made a lie!
Dou you know what it’s like to die?
Guess you’ll know soon.
(Better hide!) =)
Reality bursts and so does your miiiiiiiiind.
Look to deep and you won’t like what you’ll fiiiiiind.
Don’t try and defy the darkness.
Hide and seek isn’t as easy with the heartless!
As you can see my form is findless.
And you can see my heart is mindless.
But always, my soul is timeless!
Experience torture beyond comprehension.
Due to a little, silly invention.
And don’t even mention,
the past because you know!
Dark can’t exist without light.
And just because you spared doesn’t mean you won’t
fight.
So listen up!
Just one sane move won’t do.
You’ll always come back and pay the devil’s due!
And i’m through.
The future of the past is here to stop your future with a blast!!!
Your determination just won’t last!
*Spider dance remix with muffled “breaking darkness” being repeated goes on for some time.
OOC: After this, I don’t know what to do. I need help from you guys! I will make sure to credit you if I add your ideas to the song. I will constantly update with new lyrics so you can see what has already been added.
-Pursue 42
