As you’ve not stated Manguopo’s backstory part for the book of the brotherhood, could I give his story a complete overhaul to tie him in with the other two Makuta I’m working on?
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I think you posted Manguopo more than two months ago, yes? So you probably won’t be able to delete the first story…
But you can write a new backstory - it just has to get accepted by me, too. And if you mention other Makuta there I won’t fully accept it before those other Makuta are entered into the Brotherhood Project and got accepted as well.
I’ll just have to remember not writing Manguopo’s entry …
Updated list is in post 370
Rules can be found in post 1 and additions in post 370
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Ok, time for an unnecessarily long Makuta backstory (again!) 
This one is about Makuta Sachel and I wrote it for @Sammythekat because he asked for help there. Add it to Sachel’s topic and I will accept him - but please also mention that the backstory is from me.
And @TheRed1s - of course I talked a bit with Sammythekat before I wrote this and he mentioned something along the way of Sachel dieing because of a Kanohi. And I immediately thought of the mysterious mask Makuta Tak found inside a Rahi. And then I asked myself - how did it get there? And decided to make Sachel’s backstory something like a prequel to that. I hope that’s okay with you?
So, here’s the probably slightly too long backstory:
Sachel was the chief librarian of the Brotherhood of Makuta. Originally he just kept all the Rahi creation recipes in order, but after the Brotherhood began having a military presence within the Matoran Universe and especially after Miserix assigned Makuta to the various regions, Sachel’s tasks expanded considerably, since Miserix wanted the library on Destral to include every bit of knowledge the Brotherhood gathered.
This also included the archival storage of important artifacts, which grew to be Sachel’s favorite sector. He would spend more and more time acquiring interesting and valuable artifacts or at least replicas of them to add to his collection.
The former Matoran Shamsel became his assistant after Mutran got weary of him and dumped Shamsel into some mutagenic substance before casting him out of his laboratory.
One day rumors of a mysterious mask reached Sachel, that was said to make its wearer immortal. Intrigued, he set off to find it, taking Shamsel with him.
And indeed the rumors proofed true. He found the mask hidden on some remote island, a thing that was all jagged edges and gleamed in a cold, cruel golden light.
Sachel sent Shamsel back to Destral with it, while he himself traveled on to Stelt, to collect some other valuables that had ended up in Jsasax’s hands, just to learn upon his return that his assistant had been attacked, robbed and killed before he reached the Brotherhood’s fortress.
The trail led Sachel to a Matoran village, protected by two Toa of which one had died recently. The remaining one, sick with grief over his fallen comrade, had set out on his own to find the fabulous “Mask of Immortality” and when discovering that the Makuta nearly had it safe inside their fortress, became desperate.
When Sachel arrived, he was just placing the jagged mask over his friends face.
Sachel walked towards the small hut where the fearful Matoran had told him he could find the Toa. He hated this kind of solving problems, but murder by a Toa on one of the Brotherhood’s servants couldn’t be tolerated – and besides, all those pumped up so called “warriors” of his fellow Makuta were more likely to raze the whole village to the ground, stepping on the mysterious mask in the process or damaging it otherwise. He snorted. At least one Toa shouldn’t proof any problem.
He opened what passed for a door on this ramshackle building by ripping it out with gravity and flinging it away, exposing the view on a Toa of Plasma, no, two Toa, the Plasma one was bent over one of Plantlife. Apparently a dead one since his heartlight didn’t flash. What immediately caught Sachel’s attention though, was that the Toa of Plasma was just placing the jagged mask he had stolen over the other Toa’s face.
“So here you are”, Sachel growled and stepped into the doorway. “Explain yourself, Toa, and maybe you’ll-”
The mental blast that suddenly blew through his mind was horrific. Sachel tumbled back a step, then fell down to his knees, as his legs gave way under him. His vision blurred and he was just dimly aware of the Toa of Plasma collapsing also, while the dead Toa slowly rose – not by lifting his arms and legs, more like he grotesque puppet of some user of telekinesis, arms and legs dangling while he floated half a bio above the ground. His eyes began to glow in a piercing cold blue.
Sachel’s head felt like it would split open any moment, but he mustered all the mental strength he had and turned it into a shield that deflected the attack enough, that he could think clearly again. Whatever just happened, there was no way a Toa of Plantlife could muster psionic powers strong enough to nearly knock out a Makuta with a single blast.
Slowly Sachel got up again, trying to scan his surroundings while keeping an eye on the floating form of the Toa. The Matoran who had followed him were all dead, as was the Toa of Plasma and the Rahi in the nearest pen. A mental blast strong enough to outright kill.
The dead Toa’s mouth opened and he began to speak in a voice that sounded like a Toa’s, but at the same time didn’t.
“At last I am free … but this body … is weak. No way to channel my power. You have withstood me, mortal. I sense your might.Yours will suit me better…”
“Who -What are you?” Thinking was difficult. Still the mental storm was battering at his defenses. And it originated from this thing. He had to stop it and get that mask.
“I am …?” For some reason the question seemed to startle the creature. “I am the immortal … Kivri. Kivri, … Toa of … Plantlife? No, that was before …”
Sachel never had bothered to study tactics or hone his fighting skills and reflexes, but he knew an opportunity when he saw one. He brought up his palm and blasted the thing in the hut with a bolt of Chain Lightning, then used Gravity to collapse the building on it.
Or at least he tried, but the building wouldn’t collapse. He focused more of his power on it, but all that showed were fissures, while the walls and the roof stayed in place. Then the whole thing suddenly blew outwards, stone shrapnel piercing his body and bouncing off his armor and mask.
While his Quick Healing ability set to work, the dust dispersed and he could again see his opponent, a black crater in the Toa’s chest marking the spot where he had hit it with his lightning bolt. He flung another one in the things direction, but this time it was stopped halfway there – simply caught in the air. The combined powers of half a dozen Toa of Psionics wouldn’t have been able to accomplish this. Still Sachel was ready for the riposte when it came, lowering his body’s density so that the reversed bolt of lightning passed right through him and struck another hut, setting it afire.
“You’re tough, eh? But let’s see how much it distracts you when your body is all over the place.”
Sachel reached for his magnetic powers, focused them on the limply floating form of the Toa and then pulled in opposite directions. Nothing stopped him this time, the Toa’s body was cleanly ripped apart. When he stopped everything just fell to the ground.
He allowed himself a smirk. Whatever Psionic abilities that thing possessed, let it try assembling itself the right way only by telekinesis. Sachel approached a few steps, then stopped. The eyes behind the mask still glowed and seemed to follow him.
Carefully he ripped the head loose from its half of the body, then pulled it to him with gravity. The power this dead Toa had used had to originate from the mask, but he wasn’t sure what role the body had played in it. The thing most definitely wasn’t entirely dead yet – even though it now was no more than a head with a mask. Perhaps all that “Mask of Immortality” stuff wasn’t entirely wrong.
When the head reached him, Sachel extended a hand to pull the mask loose from it, but the moment his fingers brushed the cold metal, he felt a presence blowing through his mental defenses like an avalanche, unstoppable and terrifying.
He tried pulling loose from the mask, but his body didn’t obey him anymore. His mind was in turmoil, something rooting through his memories, studying and then erasing everything. Sachel could do nothing but stand by and watch, while his very identity began to vanish, his knowledge seeping out of him, leaving nothing but emptiness. He tried to use any one of his powers to stop what was going on – no, he didn’t even know what was going on anymore, he just wanted it to stop, to leave him alone.
“What? What was this?”
He couldn’t even say if the voice was his or that of someone else, if it was just inside his head or outside, too. Nor could he make out what it was talking about. Who was he, anyway? Pain shot through the thing that was him, just for a short instant. Then the Makuta named Sachel was gone.
The Rahi looked down at the armored figure. It had no idea what had happened to this one, but it tasted bad. The Rahi spat out some fingers. Well, it didn’t matter if one tasted wrong, there were so many others to feed from. Surely some of them would be better tasting. If it remembered correctly, the little ones always had been particularly delicious.
It trudged away from the dead Makuta, sniffed at the remnants of Toa Kivri, then went over to the nearest Matoran, as it decided that there was too much armor there, too. A feast was served and it wouldn’t waste it.
@Sammythekat (You’re allowed to compress the second part, if you want, but I had such fun writing it that I simply had to make it part of this ;))
Updated list is in post 370
Rules can be found in post 1 and additions in post 370
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I loved it, and works perfectly to justify the mask’s location my short story.
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Copied the entire thing and pasted it into the OG topic.
Thanks, dude!
Ok, it’s time for a new list again, as I won’t be able to edit the old one anymore by somewhen tomorrow.
I’ll put the complete set of rules below it, so definitely take a look if you want to participate!
Even if the first post says something different, what is written here is the real thing.
The first post still includes some other information you should read before entering, though!
= drawing done
= “Book of the Brotherhood” entry completed but not yet edited
= “Book of the Brotherhood” entry done
Both, the drawing and the “Book of the Brotherhood” entry will be posted once the project is complete. For more information see post 374 and 470.
Male Makuta, accepted - builder
- revamped Teridax - Payinku
- revamped Icarax - Toa_Heatwave
- revamped Krika - TFM101A
- revamped Bitil - 21sselliW
- revamped Spiriah - The_Wanderer
- revamped Mutran - Gilahu
- revamped Miserix - Toa_Heatwave
- Jsasax, Makuta of Stelt - RedHuna101
- Jarnat - Gilahu
- Gantil - LurkingEhlek
- Troodax - Whovian41110
- Xoth - 21sselliW
- Nevantar - TBT_Emerald
- Tagah - Chronicler
- Hesbrix - P1gNinja
- Zurta - 21sselliW
- Uloki - Rac
- Zhun - Rac
- Hormahk - pizzacheetah
- Furtaan - Chronicler
- Crytoss - Leoxandar
- Clanik - Rac
- Dredzek - Chicken Bond, uploaded by Windfall
- Erevor - TBT_Emerald
- Netrux - Hawkflight
- Anjan - Gilahu
- Jorax - DG_Eddie
- Verahk - Rac
- Xirok - Sushiyoda
- revamped Antroz - Lord_Tuma
- Tak - TheRed1s
- Manguopo - Darkbrick999
- Jormuntrax - Solaris
- Chisk - Xing1870
- Reppirax - Sciencegiraffe
- Napak - Povak
- Tridax - Toa_Heatwave
- Cenred - Toa_Distraxx
- Ornek - Gilahu
- Aplekisa - MysteryMuffin
- Piraunga - The_Wanderer
- Marzek - Timeline15
- Sachel - Sammythekat
- Erdorn - Timeline15
- Lomois - Leoxandar
- Irutra - ToaPanda
Male Makuta, assigned/not yet accepted - builder
47) Nhilkus - TheMoltenKing
48) ? - Kardax
49) Durantaz - pizzacheetah
50) ? - ToaTeramur
51) Kohuru - darkbrick999
52) ? - Silver_Falcon
53) ? - Overlord
54) Fenerak - AdamusTheFirst
55) ? - h1vem1nd
56) Adrion - AdamusTheFirst
57) ? - RedHoodieReveiwer
58) Falkin - Silver_Falcon
59) ? - mravacadomonkey
60) ? - E44
61) ? - Ekorak
62) ? - LurkingEhlek
63) revamped Chirox - The_Wanderer
64) Raximoras - Gringat
65) Shale - JordanWill
66) revamped Vamprah - EvilLobsterKing
67) Zurel - Sammythekat
68) Suurat - Kanohippy
69) Ormen - Nogus1
70) ? - SmeatyFlavor
71) Shornos - TBT_Emerald
72) ? - Omega_Tahu
73) ? - AwesomeJoel27
74) ? - MakutaTexxidos*
75) Moldavanka - Irrie
Female Makuta, accepted - builder
86) revamped Gorast - Gringat
87) Kindrix - Gilahu
88) Kraiden - Payinku
89) Isthra - 21sselliW
90) Vadkanda - Windfall
91) Scarla - Chicken Bond, Uploaded by Windfall
92) Thorkahn - JMP
93) Ahkaxx - MakutaTexxidos
94) Mazla - Povak
95) Tethis - The_Wanderer
96) Nebunie - MysteryMuffin
Female Makuta, assigned/not yet accepted - builder
97) Vulon - AdamusTheFirst
98) Arknas - Whovian41110
99) ? - Aegyptiacus
100) Rerekei - Cyclopian
To be assigned
- 9 other male Makuta
- Kojol
Notes:
The five Makuta who sided with Miserix at the convocation are all done already.
The two Makuta who were kept by Teridax to create Kraata after he took over the Matoran Universe and were later killed are done already.
The Makuta who was killed by Toa Zaria is done already.
All female Makuta are assigned/already done.
@AdamusTheFirst
MOCs will be accepted, when trio is complete with proper backstory.
@TFM101
Don’t forget to update Krika
@Silver_Falcon
Falkin will get accepted as soon as the Makuta he killed is done and gets accepted
If I got anything wrong, please tell me.
Rules
CONCERNING THE MOC:
1) Makuta wear Kanohi
Your MOC should wear a mask or have a head that looks like a mask.
2) Good design
Your MOC should look like something you spent some time on. It needs a proper colour scheme and should also get the “Makuta look” across.
3) Colour Scheme
Makuta as beings of Shadow should not have a colour scheme associated with Light. You can use gold pieces (if you really have to) or white armor, but no white and gold colour scheme.
4) Titan Size
Ideally your MOC should have the complexity of a Titan build, although I’m somewhat tollerant in that point. Have a look at my Makuta MOCs if you want to get an impression of what I deem perfect in that regard.
5) “Original” Form
The Makuta should be humanoid and not mutated. This means they should walk upright, have exactly two legs, one head and a minimum of two arms. You’re allowed to add more arms, wings, tail(s) etc.
6) Picture Quality
At least the main picture of your MOC shouldn’t be too dark/too bright/blurred and such. Everyone should be able to tell colours apart and see details.
7) CCBS and Technic
This is a project that aims at creating G1 characters. It would make me extremely happy if you could use no CCBS parts for your MOC.
But since the era of the G1 building system is 5 years gone and some of you understandably don’t have any/very few G1 parts, CCBS MOCs of course will get accepted, too. But please at least consider using no CCBS if you can. Thanks.
CONCERNING THE BACKSTORY:
1) Kanohi rule:
Your Makuta aren’t allowed to wear the following masks (again, just to be sure: Your MOC can wear any mask you like, you just have to say that it is a different mask):
- Avsa, Mask of Hunger
- Mohtrek, Mask of Time Duplication
- Shelek, Mask of Silence
- Jutlin, Mask of Corruption
- Othla, Mask of Fear (name by 21sselliW)
- Pakari, Mask of Strength
- Kiril, Mask of Regeneration
- Matatu, Mask of Telekinesis
- Kualsi, Mask of Quick Travel
- obviously not the Kraahkan, but also no mask that is “shaped like a Kraahkan”
- no masks that just exist in very limited numbers (Olmak, Kanohi Nuva, etc.)
This doesn’t apply to already accepted MOCs. It doesn’t apply to canon Makuta with known masks either, of course, but it does apply to those whose masks aren’t given.
There might be Kanohi added to this list from time to time, so be sure to have a look before uploading your MOC.
2) Canon story rule:
Your Makuta has to die before the entrance to Karda Nui is discovered. That would be around the time Jaller and his friends set out to find the Toa Nuva.
(the “no longer Makuta” side paragraph doesn’t work anymore)
Again, this obviously excludes canon Makuta, whose fates we know.
3) Dark Hunter - Brotherhood of Makuta War Rule
No more Makuta are allowed to have found their end through the hands of the Dark Hunters after outbreak of the war (shortly after Mata Nui was put to sleep)
4) Makuta kill Makuta rule A
Your Makuta isn’t allowed to kill another Makuta except if you do another Makuta MOC which is killed by the first one in its backstory. If so, tell me and that first MOC will get accepted as soon as the second one gets accepted, too.
5) Toa kill Makuta rule
Toa aren’t allowed to be responsible for your Makuta’s death.
6) Death through the Order of Mata Nui rule:
No more Makuta are allowed to have died through the hands of the Order of Mata Nui. The exception are canon Makuta.
7) Makuta kill Makuta rule B:
If your Makuta is killed by another Makuta, I (Gilahu) might request you to change the killer’s name if I feel like this Makuta already killed enough others or doesn’t fit as killer. You’re allowed to use every Makuta accepted into this project as killer, as long as it makes sense (in my eyes).
Backstory help
If you need help with a backstory, I’m always ready to help.
Here are some suggestions (thanks to @E44 with helping out here) (please tell me if you want to use one of these):
- Makuta Chasnon (post 334)
- a Makuta who shunned his inner shadow and became a Makuta of Light (somewhat like in the Melding alternate Universe) but was killed because of … reasons even prior to the war with the Barraki by his brethren (@Sammythekat)
- a Makuta who specialized on creating sentient plants - creator of the Daikau
- a Makuta who specialized on creating crablike Rahi - absorbed by Chirox after they together created the Zivon (so that Chirox could take all the credit for it (or something))
- a Makuta who was something like the security chief of Destral
- a Makuta who studied elemental powers and how it worked that they could be activated in a Matoran during the transformation into a Toa. In the days after Teridax’s takeover this Makuta thus captured multiple Matoran and Toa and experimented with them. He eventually found out a lot about the mysterious “Toa Power” in the process and even might have been able to extract it from Toa and create Toa stones with it.
Death sources:
- prior to Teridax’s takeover and the Makuta’s evolution they could still die by simply stabbing them with a pointy stick in the right place. After the evolution it wasn’t so easy anymore
- Makuta were working with viruses to create Rahi. They were able to create a virus that put Mata Nui to sleep and eventually killed him and also one that devoured Protosteel. Perhaps one Makuta wasn’t careful enough while creating a certain new virus and became … ill. And later died from that disease.
- death by trying to absorb something too powerful/too many beings at once
There might be things added/removed here from time to time.
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Rerekei’s new torso is done.
Ok, so to keep you up to date even beyond what stands on the list (post 586 from now on, by the way), here’s the progress I have made so far with the drawings and the “Book of the Brotherhood”:
- 21 drawings are done
- I’m working on text 17 and with the great help of @Toa_Heatwave and @pizzacheetah 4 of them have been edited so far
But I also would like to mention that with the backstories of certain Makuta I’m not as happy now as I was in the past - those that contradict with canon in some way. This is why I will change certain “minor” things in the backstories of the following Makuta for their “Book of the Brotherhood” entries, no matter what. I will tell you here in advance, though, so that it won’t come as a surprise. I hope these changes are no problem for you. Whatever you wrote in the Makuta’s entry doesn’t need to be changed.
- Makuta Kindrix by me - will not survive, instead dies when the vat where Chirox kept her gets shattered during the Great Cataclysm
- Makuta Hormahk by @pizzacheetah - will not attack Teridax on Miserix’s order, instead he first sides with Miserix, then joins Teridax. When most of the other Makuta already had left the convocation chamber, he strikes at Teridax from behind, but gets killed by him.
- Makuta Tak by @TheRed1s - will not die through Teridax and an army of Rahkshi after Teridax has taken over the Great Spirit Robot, instead he dies during the attack of the Order of Mata Nui, when the ceiling collapses over him
- Makuta Thorkahn by @JMP will not be wounded in Karda Nui and later die in the Energy Storm, instead she dies in the fight with Makuta Erevor at the entrance of Karda Nui
That’s all at the moment. If anyone of the builders has a better idea to fix the “problem” you’re free to say so.
Updated list is in post 586
Rules can be found in post 586 and additions in post 1
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Thanks for the offer, but no.
I want to do the drawings all by myself because a) it is something like a reward from me for everyone who participated, b) I want to keep the style of all the drawings similar and c) I want to have those drawings here with me as physical things so I can make myself a proper “Book of the Brotherhood” with the texts and the matching drawings.
EDIT:
@21sselliW
Just noticed that you haven’t mentioned what Kanohi Zurta is wearing - maybe you could tell me?
Updated list is in post 586
Rules can be found in post 586 and additions in post 1
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Huh.
Odd.
How about a mask of Water? Since A) he’s a water-themed Makuta, and B) the MOC has the G2 Mask of Water (Though the character would obviously have a G1 Mask of Water in the story).
~W12~
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I have made the left and right arms of my new Makuta 
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I feel like that’s a little redundant though, since I didn’t think Makuta, being gaseous beings, needed to breathe at all.
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I think you got something confused there ;). The mask of Water would give the wearer limited control over water (in G1), while a Kaukau would give the wearer the ability of water breathing. (Or so I would say.)
@21sselliW
I’ll define Mask of Water like this then for G1: Enables the wearer to manipulate water - but he can neither create water nor absorb it.
The Kanohi will also need a proper name, though - what about … Kanohi Udras, Mask of Water?
Updated list is in post 586
Rules can be found in post 586 and additions in post 1
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I like the name Kanohi Kaino or Kaimano. “Kai” meaning “ocean” in Hawaiian, and “Mano” being one of the gods that resided in the ocean, specifically a shark god. Hawaiian is a similar language to Maori, where many of the G1 BIONICLE names come from, so I figured that could potentially be a good fit.
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Can I see the drawing of Troodax?
I like this one, myself.
They don’t – at least after the Makuta evolution.
~W12~
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@pizzacheetah @21sselliW
Ok, Kanohi Kaino it is then.
The drawings will all be posted once the project is finished and I have them all done. Stay hyped until then
By the way, what about Makuta Arknas?
Updated list is in post 586
Rules can be found in post 586 and additions in post 1
Wow.
It’s really almost ogre.
It’ll be cool to see such a big project actually hit completion.
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I have another MOC that I’ve been thinking about submitting, but it’s not one that I want to modify, so I’m checking if he fits the bill in his current state:
Would you consider Tarduk’s helmet a viable head? I’ve always thought it looked like a mask, but I wanted official opinion.