Yeah i didn’t have any personality or story for him so you can do what you want.
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UPDATE:
Since most of you have requested for me to make big pictures and the chapters the story will take A LOT more time to be finished. For example I’m working on the chatper 1 painting ft. Nuguk.
In the end I think this was the best decision, since it will allow to have a great story and drawings to go with it. Of course in exchange of time.
I believe the chapter 1 painting will be released in a few days along with chapter two: PINK
Again, thanks everybody for their support and don’t forget to leaf a like and subscribe enjoy as always!
-G
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Wuts this? Another chapter? Already? Well since I’m going to be busy all the week doing Nonya DO NOT ASK I figured I would post this chapter. In my opinion this is the best chapter yet. Anyway you are the judges of course! Please do share, grab your popcorn, grab your Bonkles and enjoy the chapter!
#CHAPTER 2: PINK
-“WE ARE TOWAAAAAA, HAHA”- said Plasmu in great joy
-“Do not get carried away, we are nothing but warriors until we prove to be heroes”- said Shiku in a cold voice. He wasn’t very joyful, he saw heroism as his one ture destiny and would always think of tactics and plans to solve any situation.
-“Now that you mention it how do we prove to be heroes? Do we have to save someone?”- said Pumua
-"Or something, haha I know I’m saving these korutus for later! (Korutus is an unusual type of fruit only used in special events, they have a sour flavor which Kaeeno was very fond of, reminded him of his home in Ga-koto. He would soon see his home now that he was a Toa).
-“About time, the Nuraki game is about to start!”- said Koano, she had a special attraction towards Nuraki games, the thrill and danger of the danger caught her attention when younger, she never got to play this game though, it was mostly practiced in Po-koto, Ga-koto and Le-koto.
Drums started beating, flags were raised and the contestants went into their postitions.
“Ladies and Gentlemen! In honor of the newly chosen Toa-Kaly we celebrate with what is to be our biggest Nuraki game yet!” Two teams have been chosen to honor the new toa. Accompanied by us is our chronicler…Celu! She will be taking record of this massive event!
On this corner we have… the Le-koto team! Rhaku and Fulx!
And on the other side we have…the Po-Koto team!
As soon as the announcer said Po-koto, Koano couldn’t help but notice Eherad was nowhere to be seen.
-“UGH! If she wasn’t so innocent I would throw her down the biggest mountain in Ko-koto”
She glanced at the stadium before she went looking for her, the ball of kotodermis had already been deployed and the contestants were already throwing it with their elbows and hips. These was a rather dangerous sport.
-“sigh”
She walked a bit and eventually found Eherad rolling in the sand, looking at the sky.
-“Listen! Come back here and watch the game! These is our feast! Our history! Our legend!”
-“heh, yes…it is our party, but we are not legends yet heh… I remember when the Elder arrived to Po-koto…Zaku. He used to tell me and the other kids legends. Most of them were weird and often seemed made up, but I always wondered…what if they are true? You know, I asked myself if these stories were real…I wanted and still want to be part of one, but…what good is it if we are to become a myth?”
-“Don’t think like that! How are you even going to become a myth if all you do is lay down there!”
-“Meh, I’ll just be sand roller, seems like the best I can do haha”
Eherad then stopped and looked to the sky, she remembered the story Zaku told her, she still wanted to be like the warrior of the story.
-“Welp, I guess I’ll give the party a chance, eh.”
Koano seemed satisfied, she quickly ran to the stadium. Eherad slowly followed her, thinking about the future.
Meanwhile Zaku was away from the game too, he was there when it started but as always, he left without anyone even noticing. He went to his camp again, meditating about the future of his new toa, when suddenly…his mind felt something…he felt…sadness…hate… He quickly stood up and for the first time in decades he felt it fear, fear of his Toa.
-“The sky…”
He quickly ran to the stadium, rushing as fast as he could.
CRASH. CRASH. CRASH
Metal and rock could be heard clashing together, sparks could be seen all over the place. This place was sacred, yet disturbed by the hatred and micery that surrounded the miners. Screams of pain, roars of the mighty beast made the whole underground vibrate.
-“My king…the witch has told me…about the new toa…the new warriors…I swear my king, that I will honor your name, and rule as a true hier of Aura-nui…when these warriors fall…even before they become heroes, I will spill Okotoan blood in your name. I will claim what is rightfully mine.”
-“Sire…we found their whereabouts, they are in the Po-koto village known as Rudaa.”
…
-“Have the Bahraku defeated the Guardian yet?”
-“No sire…but they will eventually…”
-“Get out of my sight before I do it for you.”
-“O-of course sire!”
This ruler…this vicious being known as Zilosd graved his great Scythe stepped into the battle and as he raised his weapon a huge pink vortex appeared. He absorbed rocks around the place and then threw this into the Guardian with mighty force. The Guardian of Knowledge had finally been brought to it’s knees. It was an enormous dragon, silver and yellow. The Bahraku were astonished, they had not yet witnessed the power of Zilosd.
-"What are you waiting for? Chain the beast, I want it…and if it is not chained by the time I get back I will grab one of you and throw it to its head instead!
Zilosd walked into the entrance of the shrine. It was sealed, strongly, but it wasn’t protected by runes or spells. This was pribably due to the elders of the time thinking the Guardian was more than enough to protect the place. However it would certainly take time to bring down the gates of the inner section.
-“Master, what shall we do?” Said the witch
-“The same as the Okotoan are doing…celebrating.”
-“How are we to do so?”
Zilosd turned around and looked at her for a moment, thinking. He glanced at the hall he entered a few moments ago and the Guardian still fought with little strength, but was still trying to stand.
-"Kill the Bahraku, cast me new ones, better ones. I want that dragon chained, meanwhile…I will take Rasgath. When your troops are done, we will go and get ourselfs some okotoans…and we will take their destiny…to make ourselfs one.
-“As you command”
END OF CHAPTER 2
Nope.
As a matter of fact, to prevent numerous posts guessing the game, just PM me, and actually post thoughts on the chapter. Pretty please
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Is the Nuraki game based on Soccer? By the way can we only guess once?
Also this was great thank you for taking your time to make this for us.
I was just about to suggest that.
Chapter was great can’t wait to see were your going to go with this one.
I like how you introduced Zilosd, defeating an incredibly powerful foe sets him as an OP villain. Just pay attention to not screw him up when he will fight against the Toa.
@GIF.Man.Ben Nah, in soccer touching the ball with your elbows is against the rules.
Well, I think it’s against the rules, like using your hands if you’re not a goalkeeper, not sure tho.
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another great chapter, BUT IM LATE AGAIN!
wait wha? wha contest? dont tell me im late again
is a gif with blood too brutal for the boards?
ohhhh that one, yeah, I don’t know many sports so…
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Everyone, the contest is over, @Omega won. And just to be the mercyful queen I trully am…
i won’t tell you what it was! Nyehehehe
it was mayan inspired
You know the one I offered a big picture to whoever figured out what the Nuraki game was based on. I already have a winner so…
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Good chapter, better than the first. My original thought that having someone else look over it beforehand still stands (as the Editor-In-Chief of Honolulu Midweek once said, “There is no such thing as good writing, only good re-writing”) but I’m enjoying the story more and more now. I like the interactions between the characters, as most writers will tell you, a story is nothing without likeable characters. Keep it up!
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I this Shuku or… ?
But anyway,These are great. You’ve got a few weird spelling errors but otherwise very good.
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Yeah I called him Shiku since the first chapter, thought you had noticed heh.
And yeah, I make a lot of mistakes, I’m not the best in spelling. So…what do you think about the story?
Oh and also for everyone watching.
#DO NOT PM MORE SPORT GUESSING, OMEGA ALREADY WON.
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Yeah,it just confused me for a bit.
[quote=“BlueCel, post:96, topic:17649”]
So…what do you think about the story?
[/quote]Seems gud.
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And so the journey continues…
#CHAPTER THREE: THE LEGENDS
As Zaku ran through the cold sand of Po-koto, as cold as the icefields of Ko-koto during night his rushed heart beat could be heard by all the little rahi in their tiny holes, tarakavas, ginuks, every creature could feel his dispair. As soon as he arrived to the colliseum of Nuraki, in an unusual tone for him, a tone of fear, he shouted:
“EVERYONE GET OUT!”
All the okotoans looked at him, for a second they stood still, but realizing it was Zaku the one that shouted they all exited the building, they did not need a reason other than Zaku’s word. In the crowd the younger one could be heard asking what was going on, some were also crying. Some of the parents were worried, they told the children that the Toa and Zaku could somehow overcome the challenge, however even the old ones were scared to see Zaku in such a rush.
“Elder, what is it!?” Said Plasmu
“There is great danger, I felt it, it’s coming towards us”
"What shall we do elder? Said Kaeeno
“…we cannot fight, not yet…hide the okotoan, lead them out of here, we-”
“Run? Elder with all due respect we defeated Nuguk, we can deal with this” said Shiku
“…did you not listen! We must get them all out.”
“Elder but-but what’s happening?” Said Pumua
Mindless discussion like this went on, most of the toa felt too confident to leave, some of them felt scared. They were not united yet, they could not agree and felt the need to prove themselves in battle. However Zaku finally put an end to this and the toa were silent.
“Now, you take them out of here! Or else, all hope for this people will be lost…
Take them to Onu-koto, there they will be safe for a few days.”
“As you say Elder” said all the Toa.
They quickly ran towards the crowd. The tallest ones, Kaeeno and Plasmu quickly took some of the okotoan and placed them in the Glatadars. The Glatadars were long vehicles which could reach unimaginable speeds for a limited time, these were often used to cross the dry and boiling hot deserts of Po-koto during day.
The other Toa quickly directed all of the others to the sandstone fields, here they could hide if danger reached them before they could scape to Onu-koto.
Suddenly…Eherad as she carried a young child the sky turned pink. She took the child to the road and then quickly stood up and gasped in fear, could the legends be true? Could this mean the arrival of the long lost child?
And before anyone could do anything, even blink…a huge wave threw everyone that wasn’t already in the roads or the Gladatars flying away, knocking most of them out. Tumbleweeds, Rahi, all kinds of things were sent away…
Eherad stood up, she had crashed against one of the stones in the entrance to the road, she could handle this though, she was tough, yet she almost never experienced pain at this level. Shiku and Pumua went to aid her, soon the others arrived too, all the other okotoan were placed safely in the road. They all looked to the sky and saw a figure…a giant monster that had the appearance of a moth. Everytime its wings flapped they could feel the force of it and using their weapons they tried to resist this.
In fron of it, more beast with the appearance of locusts landed in the village. The toa were scared, but they were ready to defend the road.
Many Bahraku, a new kind of them, a much more terrifying one came out of the beasts and started attacking the whole village of Rudaa.
The Toa went and attacked this creatures with all their might. Plasmu would have joked around and laughed as he beat them up with his newly received whips, however, the situation, the fact that these creatures managed to scare Zaku didn’t allowed him or the others to even speak. Not even Shiku could come up with a strategy to fight them.
Then…the giant monster landed
Zilosd slowly descended from his beast, Rasgath. Some of the protectors that were present saw him and went to attack him. As soon as Zilosd saw them he opened a vortex, absorbed a stone and then with it’s matter he made a huge shockwave that knocked all of the protectors down. He chuckled a bit as he saw these lying in the ground. He slowly walked towars them, but as he did this he saw an inmense of purple crystals sending some of his troops into the sky. He knew no protector was capable of doing this, he had found hpwhat he was looking for…the Toa.
He walked towards the battlefield leaving the unconsious protectors behind, had he not seen Pumua’s elemental powers in action he would have most likely killed these protectors.
As he walked into the battle he spotted the toa.
“Heh…captain…”
“Sire”
“Tell the troops to stop”
“As you command sire”
Suddenly all the Bahraku stopped fighting, all of them stepped back making a giant circle around the Toa. This place was known as the fountain of Irilhud,vhere is were most of the water is distributed to the village of Rudaa. The Toa looked confused, yet they did not speak a single word, but Eherad, as she simply said:
“Wait what?”
All the others looked at her, not angry, but a little confused.
“…so, you are the Toa” said Zilosd as he looked at them.
“Hm, I expected more qualified warriors than you.”
Shiku and Kaeeno wanted to say something, but they were speechless.
“Here is the deal, you drop your weapons, and I’ll kill you quickly, painless if you will, or you keep fighting, and I make you wish that old man had never asked you to become warriors.”
As he said these words, he actually wondered were Zaku was.
“Captain, look for the elder”
After he said this some troops went to scout the village, as this happened Shiku instantly ran towards them, but Zilosd opened a vortex which made Shiku fall on his back.
“Hm, I’ll let him speak for all of you”
Zilosd grabbed a tiny pink sphere and instantly made it into a scythe. He approached the Toa in a vicious way, he wanted to see their blood spill.
The Toa went forward to attack him too, and just before Zilosd swinged his scythe to open a Vortex in between them to absorb them, Zaku froze Zilosd’s hand and then with his taff hit Zilosd in the head. This made him stumble a bit, but at the same time it made him more desperate and angry than he was before.
He opened his eyes, just to find out that the Toa and Zaku were gone. He stared at the ground were they stood before Zaku appeared…he started laghing a bit.
He started to laugh even louder, almost to the point of crying, then said.
“Haha…ha, captain.”
“Yes sire”
Zilosd quickly turned around and with a vortex he absorbed the captain and then with a scream, almos a growl he shot a pink beam to the sky in full rage.
“Elder what just happened??”
“I told you not to fight! He could have killed you! What good is a toa if it’s dead! If I hadn’t been there all of you would have died.”
“Well a dead toa could become a legend to inspire other…”
"Shut up!
"No you shu-
“SILENCE”
Again all the toa were quiet.
“…My students…my Toa. If you cannot stand yourselfs how will you stand a chance against him? You are like children!”
“We can’t stand a chance against anything at this point if you don’t tell us what was that? Who…was that?”
“I am afraid you all know the answer”
They all stood silently and then in a quiet voice Pumua said…
“Was that…the child?”
“But…weren’t those legends?”
“Elder…wha-”
“No…everything that child stood for is lost…he…he is dead, that is just…a mindless body…a soul without rest.”
“So…the legends are real…”
"Yes…they are…but as with all legends, they never tell the exact event…I will tell you this…but, we shall first take care of them…the night is far from over.
They continued transporting the okotoan, silently, most were crying or simply scared.
As they walked towards Onu-koto…Eherad looked back, just to see the leftovers of the beam that had been shot. Such a beautiful sight…yet such a mounstrous beaing made it.
END OF CHAPTER THREE
RASGATH
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Funny, when I finally get around to read chapter 2, you upload chapter three.
But still, I really like where the series is going so far. I can’t wait to see what happens next.
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So you are on chapter 2? Definetely check out chaoter three, won’t disappoint.
My spelling is god tier
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Actually I posted that after reading chapter 3. I just wanted to point that out because I thought it was funny. Like I said, I’m liking the story so far, and can’t wait to see what happens next.
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That was some amazing word play right there folks.
You are a great story teller @BlueCel, and a great artist you could go places kid.
Zilosd is turning out to be a great villain. I’m liking the old guy to, not sure how i feel about the toa yet though. Also Zilosd attack move things were awesome as heck. The moth thing looks awesome, would love to make a MOC of it one day.
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Thanks everybody, all of tou for your support.
Now in honor of my succes i’m trademarking the word legend to protect my art, anyone that wants to say that word has to pay me now. (Everyone that knows the fine bros got the joke hue)
Na seriously now thank you all for your support. Now if I may ask a little favor from you is that when you tell a comment on the story please do it a little bit in depth, I mean posts like “can’t wait too see what’s next” or “this is really good!” Are nice, but in the end don’t help me a lot.
If anything you can tell me what you think of Zilosd, or even what you think will happen next, or telling me whcih character is the best to you.
Again thank you all for your support.
don’t forget to leaf a like and subscrible
thanks! Could you tell me a bit more about what you liked? Please heh?
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Aaaaay! It’s Mothra! /s
Anyway, nice chapter! I found it to be pretty entertaining! You’ve really got a good story going here! 
EDIT: Personally, I like just how fast-paced the action was, and the witty dialogue and banter between characters.
All in all, great work!
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10 hours ago? now I know why I am always late! thats like 04:00 AM! my godness, well atleast I can read it now, and enjoy it
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Hope you enjoy it, be sure to post what you think of the characters and the events!
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