Older than the stone, colder than the ice of the frozen wastes, Ever more consuming than the fires of the great volcano. Deeper than the oceans. ever more wast than the sky and heavens, ever more rich in mystery than the earth… and darker than the edge of the void, only those that knows the way of the shadow whisper it in fear.
Teridax
Some say he was cursed. other gossips about the works of other planes but the truth is just as twisted as the legned itself.
Huh… The art is excellent, and the story is intriguing as well.
What if Teridax was the chronicler for the first Toa; he followed them around and recorded their battles and such. But, during the final fight against Makuta, Teridax witnessed both the toa being vanquished but also the defeat of Makuta; when he got closer to look at Makuta, he was possessed/taken over/corrupted/etc. by Makuta. Then he would probably go into hiding or something and legends would just assume that he had died in the battle.
I like the fact that you made Teridax the leader of the brotherhood. It keeps Makuta as this singular evil entity while still incorporating the name and position of Teridax.
What if Makuta forced his thoughts into Teridax’s mind, not taking full control or turning him evil, but showing him all of Makuta’s memories in an instant. Driven with madness and fear, Teridax would seclude himself from the other inhabitants until he is forgotten entirely. While he recovers and regains his sanity, he could start to rationalize Makuta’s personality and motivations, gradually beginning to sympathize with the being until he is convinced Makuta’s way is the correct way.
