Funny story, in an earlier version of the story, this they would have hooked up quite a while before now.
The idea was that Maximus would have fallen for Axis first, (kinda like he did here, only he actually knew it). But he doesnāt know how to tell her. So he goes to Lockjaw. His captain, life mentor, and all-around father figure.
Of course being a pirate and all, he doesnāt know the first thing about actual romance. So he decided the best idea is to get the whole crew involved, and try to serenade her with a big over the top performance of Hooked on A Feeling.
Maximus being the wide eyed young lad he is was like āyeah this sounds perfect!ā
Needless to say it was just crazy enough to work in a cute and ironic sort of way. Axis seeing all of it as really endearing. He has no idea what heās doing, but heās trying his best, and its cute.
Who knows. Maybe thatās what Iāll go with when I actually write out the series in a traditional story sense like Iāve been meaning to for a long while now.
Honestly the Star Talons are a lot of fun when left to their own devices, and I cannot wait to get them involved later on.
Theyāre essentially a great big family of 50 or so, and only three of them are capable of any rational decision making. When they arenāt doing crime their either having fun or struggling to survive each other. And then they tried to raise a fricken child. Its a miracle Maximus turned out as stable as he did.
Yeah, Iām pretty much with ProfSrlojohn on this. Sure itās cliche, but went too slow. I donāt have a problem with the major beats (incident, rejection, resolution), but the in-between conversations didnāt help too much.
To specify, I thought Axisās initial rejection when Maximus tried to approach again was fine, just that the two characters had too many conversations in-between. Especially Maximus, who talked to a lot of people with little difference in advice. Now granted, there certainly needed to be some filler as just going from starting incident to rejection to rage fight to resolution would feel very weird (unless with Prof routeās and cut out the two middle sections) without it.
Though ultimately I think it being in RP is the major problem for pacing. Not because of the other player characters (not to say it didnāt contribute in pacing problems), but the IRL days that passed between each scene. When read just straight through, itās not that terrible, but drip feed by the days, weeks, it took to get here because of RP time it feels a lot longer.
For another example, the All-Spark mission with my Minicons may seem like it just dropped off the face of the earth. And if you forgot about it, donāt worry, it has been weeks since last mentioned. However, in the story as a whole and in the IC timeline, it has taken a minor breather. You might not even have noticed if it wasnāt for the lull of time that is how forum RPs run.
I personally like to think that Iota secretly streams in the music Ivory plays and the songs Juliana sings into their quarters, working with the four on dance numbers.
Name: Clutchfire
Faction: Autobot G.I. Joe
Appearance: (Editorās note: Due to the distinct lack in GI Joe and Transformers models Iām going to have to rely on a description until I can get a model made.)
Alt mode: He transforms into a V.A.M.P. Jeep, a real world equivalent would be the Lamborghini Cheetah. His deco is a combination of red, white, and blue.
Weapons: His weapon of choice is a double barreled machine gun, but he does have a sharpened shovel that is wonderful for smashing someone across the head.
Abilities: His alt modeās equipment includes a spare fuel reserve which can come in handy, along with a holographic projector affixed to the bottom. Heās also got a port for minicons although his previous partner ended up stuck back on Earth when he was captured.
When paired with a minicon he has the ability to unleash a devestating attack, by powering up a multitude of flip out guns and fire arms all at once, becoming a literal one bot army.
He can powerlinx with other cybertronians, although typically plane/jet formers end up as wings. Other bots typically end up as either using the gun heavy bot as power armor, or end up some form of power armor themselves. Powerlinxing typically ends up like thatā¦
Bio: During the war Clutchfire found himself stuck in a escape pod near Earth. He crash landed and ended up being recovered by the C.O.B.R.A. organization where he lay dormant and was studied. In a turn of events however, G.I. Joe operatives raided the facility and took the Cybertronian to their own labs. This is when he was powered on, and eventually became part of one of the Attack Squads later on when the rest of the Transformers started the war on Earth. When minicons were thrown into the mix he adopted a smaller dune buggy bot who shared his enthusiasm for explosions and good firearms. When he was captured for the event he ended up getting knocked on the head, his old injuries from the war resurfacing and laying him out coldā¦till now of course.
Name: Penicila
Faction: Autobot
Appearance: (Once again, due to my choice in design an image may take some time forthcoming) However sheās a small little minicon. Her main color-scheme is white with red highlights. Her faceplate is fashioned to look not unlike a medical mask, in fact it functions about the same filtering out any toxins in the air. Sheās fairly well proportioned lacking bulky arms or legs from alt-mode kibble, although she does have a backpack.
Alt mode: Being a triple changing minicon she has three modes. Her bot mode, a mode thatās a small little tank with a mounted gun that fires off needles. Said tank mode can have a small minicon ride on the back of it by hanging on to a couple handles. The third mode is a gun that fires off needles. This gun mode can be held by larger bots and functions similarly to a nail gun.
Weapons: In bot mode she doesnāt really have any weapons to speak of, but she can use some of her needles if the situation calls for it.
Abilities: Sheās adapt and repairing things, and really good at doing it quickly and quietly. She is a minicon, so she can power up larger bots with minicon ports.
Bio: A rather quite minicon, not by choice, but due to missing the parts required to actually speak. Her voice box is still there of course, but itās the wiring and other assorted bits around it that are mostly damaged and/or gone. Since getting spirited away here sheās been hiding out, not in the walls, but in the vents. The ventilation systems are where she retreats after picking out a little energon and some scrap to keep maintenance up. Due to the broadcast and approaching conflict, sheās fairly concerned about her current location.
I did see that, but I wasnāt exactly going to make him straight up Houndā¦Iām actually planning on making a model for him after I finish making Spiritā¦which is taking a bit longer due to complications in transformation.
Minicons are intended to be partners. Companions. Accessories. They arenāt really their own characters unless itās a dedicated team, like with the railroad team.
Truuuuue, but I figured with the established minicons having personalities, I assumed it would be wise to write out a backstory for my own. I was debating teaming this minicon up with Spirit.
